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an atheist's prayer

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October 2, 2015
an atheist's prayer by moondrums is, as the suggester writes, "a beautifully postmodern take on culture's, and more broadly, mankind's attempt to rectify knowledge with unknowing."
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dear god,

i planted no tulips in autumn
and no tulips came in spring.
how silly of me, then
to mourn the empty garden,
to long for fields of amsterdam,
to kneel at night in cold dirt,
hands folded.
i’ve learned there is
a certain ache in lacking
a thing never had, that small itch
whose relief is two seasons past –

so god, if you can hear me,
know that i am homesick
for amsterdam,
whose name, like yours, i know
but whose flowers i cannot see.
mary, mary, quite contrary
how does your garden grow? 


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edit: thank you dearly for the DD!
comment:  i am the atheist in question. this is not a work meant to disparage atheists or atheism in any way. this is a reflection of my own personal experience, nothing more. 
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thinmintbae's avatar

not even kidding when i say this is my favorite poem for years now. nothing can beat this for me. i show it to everyone